Wednesday, November 11, 2009

Carolina Urgiles


Byron, Kenny, and I are heading to the lake for a swim. Grandma warns us not to go to Collier's Landing, because a little boy died in the whirlpool there. We walk to the lake and see a sign pointing one way to a public beach and the other way to Collier's Landing. Kenny is eager to see Collier's Landing. He wants adventure. I reminds him about Grandma's warning. Byron says he won't go there. He give Kenny and I a story about "Wool Pooh," the supposed evil twin of Winnie-the-Pooh. We believe him, but Kenny still wants to go.While Kenny goes inside the Whirlpool was about to kill him but Byron goes in and saves his life.This was a really scary time in my life I thought I was going to lose both of my brothers in just one place.The good thing is that both of my brothers survived and no one else new!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

3 comments:

  1. Nice start. Try to read this aloud and edit the errors!

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  2. I stumbled on what looks like a school blog and I'm excited to keep reading and seeing you all develop into excellent writers!

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  3. Completion= 40/40
    Spelling= 10/10
    Creativity= 30/30
    Pictures= 10/10
    Map= 5/10

    Total= 95

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